A Commentary of Sorts

Hello friends, I’m going to go through some of the thoughts I had while writing my story, “Our Adventure Will Never End.” I think that some people might be interested in how I approached writing this, be it out of curiosity or seeking inspiration to create their own tales. Whatever your reason for it, I hope I can provide something for every reader to take away! I want to read your stories too! I will always try to comment on them and offer my thoughts. I will not post my name on posts in the general, but you can call me Kami or Kammy, depending on your accent. I guess I’m letting you know so you have some sort of way to refer to me. Anon is too cold for my tastes, much to the dismay of some anons on the board. You can also just ignore all this :)

In the very beginning, I had a general idea of how the story would start and end. I think that’s probably what most other people think too. I’m not really a person who plans things out though, it just comes to me. I actually hate “brainstorming” or whatever the equivalent term you were taught as a kid in English class. I know that’s a poor way to write to some people, but that’s how I do it. I do however, immediately open my laptop up if I have an idea pop up randomly throughout the day. I am quite fearful of forgetting my ideas! If you have an idea, write it down! Even if it doesn’t exactly fit the story, keep a note of it. You might return to it or even modify it and mix it with another idea.

Chapter 1

My first chapter was very long, I apologize for that! I just tend to write and write and write when I get an idea rolling. I’m not sure if I should have split it into parts or not. I kept it as a single chapter because I felt the entire chapter was a single scene. A huge dispute between Ame and Kronii is this huge situation. Ame finds herself as the last Ame in existence as all the others and their universes have been destroyed. I think that when starting, it’s important to start with a powerful intro to get your reader interested in the material. Although the length of this might have dissuaded readers too, but I did what I felt was best.

Before I get too far into the body of the writing, I just want to mention the chapter title. I think it’s better to have titles and even better to have cool sounding titles. The titles of this story are also sort of a gimmick. They don’t describe something in the current chapter, they actually describe the previous one. I thought that was a more interesting approach, I can’t say if it’s better or not. So hopefully after reading through this, you might be able to say. Some chapters it might sound like it fits in pretty well and if it does, that’s cool too! I think you should write whatever you feel fits best unless people are really hating on it. You might want to consider changing in that case.

One thing I tried to keep in mind in the first chapter was to keep Ame in the dark about what was going on, literally and figuratively. The point of this is because as a reader, you are in the same place. Now there is certainly some amount of knowledge you have. You know this is a story about Amelia and Kronii. What you know about them is your only guide within the story. Although, I guess in a way, I’m inserting my reader as Ame. You experience the world together. It’s kind of like how mystery/detective/horror type works…work. You are blind to most things the same way the detective is. The difference here is that in those works, the reader is given information by the author that the main character doesn’t have access to. The famous fourth wall, or something like that, I don’t know the actual literary term. The authors of those works try to have you solve the mysteries as much as the main character of their stories. It’s neat, I do like reading things like that. I also harken it back a bit to the visual novel series, “The Nonary Games.” I’m a huge fan of them, I enjoy the writing in the stories quite a bit. You learn about things in that world at the same pace as the main characters do. Of course you must suspend your disbelief a bit but what story doesn’t require that?

Going back to the story, I wanted you and Ame to experience things and learn about what’s going on together. I suppose I kind of lucked out on this by nature of my story. If I ever start another story, expect it to be similarly formatted. On the other end, Kronii knows everything. She appears as our antagonist, in all of her glory. I do love Kronii, I just felt like this role was built for her. When writing Kronii I thought about how to make her fearsome while keeping some of the traits we have seen her display on stream/lore. I did the same with Ame. I went back and did reps on things for both Kronii and Ame’s lore, like what Ame’s OG timeline is. (Fun fact for those who don’t know Japanese number substitution, goroawase, the numbers of the alt Ame from timeline 37564 means minagoroshi, or in English, kill everyone.) I felt a large part of this story was actually only possible because of Ame establishing that there are different versions of her from different timelines.

Thinking back on it, I don’t think I looked up as much for Ame as I did Kronii. Since I’ve been watching Ame since debut, I’ve gotten to know her mannerisms and such for a longer time. I guess that’s why Ame might appear more Ame-like to readers than Kronii. Of course I’ve watched Kronii since her debut, but I guess it’s just more familiarity with Ame than Kronii at the moment. I also think that this is beneficial for me by letting Kronii be a character I can write more freely. I think you will notice this even more in later chapters that revolve around Kronii. I did want to keep true to her sort of, existential dread, depressive sort of characterization as well as her dry/deadpan humor that she brings on stream sometimes. That is what gave me the idea to write in the first place. The lord of time, so miserable, so disillusioned she no longer wants to continue on, so she finds a way to end everything. I feel like I particularly resonate with Kronii’s approach to things we’ve seen so far.

As for IRyS just kinda showing up at the end, I wanted to keep it a mystery for the most part. A girl has to have some secrets right? Despite my extreme exposition of everything between Ame and Kronii, IRyS won’t get any sort of scene like that. This is Ame and Kronii’s story. I will be including other holomem in the story like IRyS, but they won’t be getting too much extra either.

Thank you for reading, I hope you were able to take something away from all of this. I’m not sure when I will include this commentary with my writing. I don’t want to appear like I’m spamming my material to get attention but, be on the lookout for when they are included with new chapter updates.

I <3 you Kronies