A Commentary of Sorts

Chapter 7

This was a deep part for me personally, I was hit by some of that good ol’ depression and struggled to write. Or do anything really but that’s how life is sometimes. In my head, this was chapter 2. It’s not actually chapter 2 but it’s the conclusion to the arc started in chapter 1. Or maybe it’s the compliment chapter to 1. Anyways…It opens up almost exactly the same as chapter 1, this is very much on purpose. This is our Ame here(1337) at the end of the story mimicking the end of the other timelines Ame.(37564) I thought it’d be cool to mimic their experiences and all that. Would that indicate it was one Ame or the other? Although I guess that wouldn’t work out too much since I have Ame go about things, having all the knowledge she gained throughout her journey.

So the big thing here is Kronii’s domain, which I reveal is actually Ame’s place. Or it will be one day. I actually based this domain on the VRChat world Ame created for her custom 3D stuff with the other holoen girls. I actually went into it with VR and took notes on things that I could find, snoop around and all that. That’s where the clear Month, day, year, timeline panel thing is from. The actual panel outside of the elevator in the VRChat world. It was interesting to explore and is my inspiration for the domain in my story. The same for chapter 1, the desert, the bus stop sign, the frozen Ame on the bench, the bar/lounge. All from that VRChat world. I thought it was cool.

Another feature here is I have Ame and Kronii be like, opposites? Maybe opposites isn’t the right word. With Kronii’s kimono reveal and her going into the snake/ouroboros kind of lore-ish background, I felt like it’d be cool, albiet chuuni, to make Ame and Kronii representative of that cycle. Every reset Kronii would switch positions with Ame. They’d keep their names, but their positions/titles would flip around. I thought it was cool. Maybe it’s not I don’t know. The two get to have a long talk about the situation they’re in. Lots of lore dump, life, depression type stuff.

Getting into the talk, my sort of, inspiration for the whole…series? Book? Whatever it is, I guess I should give it a name. Maybe series fits better. The inspiration for the series is the myth of Sisyphus. I won’t get into all of that here, but I think it’s pretty thought provoking.

I feel like this time around I put more of myself into both Kronii and Ame, I’m not sure if I kept their mannerisms as faithfully this time around. Maybe it’s just me trying to convince myself that life is worth living…Or whatever…life is what you make it or whatever message you take away from it. Ultimately, Ame’s journey has taught her the value of life and she wants to protect that. Kronii has given up on life and wants to end it. That’s the idea I’ve had since the beginning, I just needed to get Ame to that point in courage to face Kronii. I had her sad a lot throughout the series and I think I may have overdone it by the end. She was sad in her alt versions office, then sad again in Kronii’s domain. I wrote this in a little mini lesson on writing stories for my archive and I’m guilty of doing it. Don’t reuse trials, it lessens their value. I am guilty of this, at least I think I am. Partly due to my mindset while writing I’m sure.

Coming back to write this commentary now…is interesting to say the least. I wrote chapter 7 over a month ago. I’m just now getting to talking about it. I’ve had some lingering thoughts about it and wanted to get them out onto a page. I’ve started the sequel to this fanfic, sins of the whatever lmao. No, sins of the innocent, because it’s an alt universe that is fading because of the actions Ame and Kronii went through. I needed to reinvigorate myself, kinda hoping that writing something with a fresh perspective would help. So far I think it has, despite the public menhera moment I recently had… I’ve gotten better lately.

If you read these commentaries, thanks. It’s helpful for me, I hope it helps you. I know I’m not a perfect writer by any means. But maybe you can learn from my mistakes and improve upon your own writing.

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